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ADITL_1

Started by DR1665 · 7 months ago

Life’s little pleasures. Often foreshadowed by life’s little annoyances. The rising sun bathing the east-facing main entrance in just enough heat to prevent a chill in the morning and the convenience of the single story, multi-unit office building providing just enough shade in the ... Continue reading »

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  • Endless Monkeys

    7 months ago

    A good start. The meter and flow work well together (sorry, grammar nerd here) and that helps move the reader along. You might want to ensure you clarify things like "The two discussed the company’s AP issues" as most folks (at least me, in this case) have no concept of what "AP issues" are.

    The level of detail is good and fits well for an online audience whose attention span is often measured in small minutes.
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  • DR1665

    7 months ago

    Thank you, sir! I consider myself a grammar nerd as well, although I couldn't diagram half the sentences I write even my life depended upon it. I like to think I've been blessed with an inherent ability to "feel" the writing.

    "AP" is the common way to abbreviate "Accounts Payable." Often mated with AR, which is Accounts Receivable. In the context above (which, like the rest of this endeavor, will be based more or less loosely on real life), Kayside and Drakes are in sales, discussing their unhappiness with the company not paying their suppliers. Being sales is hard enough. Being in sales when your company is unable to deliver the product you sell is almost impossible.

    Thanks, again, for the comments. I appreciate them. It's taken me almost a year to post just this single piece. There's little more, but it's a dynamic story with a constantly evolving plot. Don't know if that will be good or bad...
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  • dhymers

    6 months ago

    You sir are quite a good writer.
    /me looks forward to more ADITL
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